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Write a Tyburn

Tyburn

A six line poem consisting of 2, 2, 2, 2, 9, 9 syllables.

The first four lines rhyme and are all descriptive words. The last two lines rhyme and incorporate the first, second, third, and fourth lines as the 5th through 8th syllables.

Example

Blackest
Darkest
Coldest
Oldest
Burning in the Blackest, Darkest night
There in lives the Coldest, Oldest fright


Amanda Krumme

23rd May 2013


Amanda - a commendable effort. I will think this through and contribute later. :)


Asma Ahsan

24th May 2013


Kitchera, I don't mean to demean your work (it is a lovely piece) but it doesn't exactly follow the rules for this type of poetry. Try reading over the discription and the example one more time and try it again maybe? Or if you need another example, I'm working on mine now. I'll post as soon as I finish. :)


Amanda Krumme

23rd May 2013


ok and i understand its not demeaning and i read through it again and that was a mistake on my part i rushed through it :P ill fix mine thanks amanda for pointing it out


Kitchera Hicks

23rd May 2013


i was thinking it over and ill have to see what i can come up with :P its a little harder than i thought


Kitchera Hicks

23rd May 2013


Taunting
Flaunting
Daunting
Haunting
The wind it blows, taunting, flaunting, proud
During the storm, daunting, haunting, loud


Amanda Krumme

23rd May 2013


Haha it is kinda tricky! Good luck Kitchera. You, too, Asma. :)


Amanda Krumme

23rd May 2013


thank you amanda :P


Kitchera Hicks

23rd May 2013


I have read it twice over, and it seems to fit the form:

Fading
Blinking
Brutal
Inky,
His vision is fading, blinking stars
Grow dim, leaving brutal inky sky.


Mere Poulard

24th May 2013


Amanda, see if this conforms to the scheme required for a Tyburn.

Whirly
Curly
Twirly
Swirly
Caught upon brook's whirly, curly race
Water dances, twirly, swirly pace.


Jim Miller

24th May 2013


Mere, your syllables are correct, but the first four lines should rhyme, and the last two lines should rhyme.

Well done, Jim! I find it very whimsical :)


Amanda Krumme

24th May 2013


THE HUMAN MIND

paging
gauging
caging
raging
Herculean paging, gauging lists
The memories caging, raging mists

(Meaning: It must be a very difficult task for the human mind to record words and series of events, forming memories that retain feelings, especially those of rage and cloudy judgements.)


Asma Ahsan

24th May 2013


I really like your poem, Asma. The last two lines should be only nine syllables though. Since the lines 1-4 are supposed to be syllables 5-8, it would go like this:

(4 syllables) (line one) (line two) (1syllable)
(4 syllables) (line three) (line four) (1syllable)

Maybe this will help everyone else too :)


Amanda Krumme

24th May 2013


Sorry, overlooked that one for some odd reason. Fixed it. :)


THE HUMAN MIND

paging
gauging
caging
raging
Herculean paging, gauging lists
The memories caging, raging mists

(Meaning: It must be a very difficult task for the human mind to record words and series of events, forming memories that retain feelings, especially those of rage and cloudy judgements.)


Asma Ahsan

25th May 2013


Yay! Great job Asma :)


Amanda Krumme

24th May 2013


mellow
yellow
fellow
jello
Sun mellows golden yellow sun rays
Fellow melts like jello this hot day


Cindy Beitinger

24th May 2013


Sorry all, I have spent a couple of days in bed sick. Just saw the new exercise I will try to post one later as I am still a little light headed. Great exercise Amanda.


Deborah Boydston

24th May 2013


Wow Asma I like that that is awesome, I'm still having a hard time rhyming isn't my thing lmao!


Kitchera Hicks

24th May 2013


Hurling
Swirling
Twirling
Furling
The artist is hurling swirling paint
The brush lines are twirling, furling; quaint.


Maddie P.

24th May 2013


Ah thanks Amanda, I completely forgot about rhyming. Rhyming the first four words severely restricts your options, so I'll just start again.


Mere Poulard

25th May 2013


I like that Maddie. Great job!


Amanda Krumme

24th May 2013


Darkling
Fleeting
Glowing
Screaming
Their young selves are darkling, fleeting sights,
Red ash lights their glowing, screaming nights.

Ok, hopefully this one does work!


Mere Poulard

25th May 2013


It does, Mere. :) Well done


Amanda Krumme

24th May 2013


Thanks Kitchera.

Cindy, Maddie and George(Mere poulard) - you guys are so good! The fellow melting like jello is my favourite so far. :)

Deborah, get well soon! I was wondering why you were missing a bit.


Asma Ahsan

25th May 2013


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