Zion Der hai Zion Der hai
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hi.ok i love this...but just a lil bit of editing in the way that i would love it if you didnt discribe it all ..keep us from knowing what it is you want to tell us ..just give us limited info an intrigue us with a teaser :)

John Ramsbottom John Ramsbottom
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A great poem. Don't over punctuate carry on the line and the meaning with for example 'walking through the forest my eyes see....

John Ramsbottom John Ramsbottom
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You little beast... try without the full stop after happened and at the end what about trying without the comma and changng and to I never turn back.

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Its midnight. The moon is up and the mist is covering it ever so slightly.
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I'm an animal- a beast I see the fire a few miles away. Walking toward the
open flame. I leap in the air, My claws swipe the air. I land on
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