Don Yarber Don Yarber
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I like this beginning.

John Ramsbottom John Ramsbottom
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simply a man a human not a God the romantic woman wants to elevate him on a pedestal as

Paul Day Paul Day
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This is a great set up and you just know what comes next.

Paul Day Paul Day
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Blinded by rose-coloured glasses is another way of putting it, but I prefer yours.

Phynne Belle Phynne Belle
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I am still trying to have a healthy relationship with "well-worn" phrases. I used "rose-colored" in a poem once...and left it at that.

Don Yarber Don Yarber
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with not a small amount indicates quite a lot of glee. This doesn't seem to fit the general "sadness" of mistakes made theme.

Phynne Belle Phynne Belle
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Hmm...I do see what you mean, but the narrator is transitioning from sadness to healing and empowerment. Any suggestions?

Don Yarber Don Yarber
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How about: I realize and my spirits rise that your charms.....

Phynne Belle Phynne Belle
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What about: "I realize/with no small amount of satisfaction...?"

Don Yarber Don Yarber
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Yes. That sounds good!

Paul Day Paul Day
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A change in pace and perspective is really quite interesting here.

John Ramsbottom John Ramsbottom
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This feels that you have not only broken down a memory into digestible pieces but whilst chewing over this youare feeding on the bad relationshi to make you a stronger person

Paul Day Paul Day
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Wow. This is so profound. Amazing writing actually.

John Ramsbottom John Ramsbottom
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excellent conclusion to a poem but also the statement makes me wonder if that has put you off the taste or you will return to life's buffet table?

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Finally...enlightenment?


How I built you up


to such heroic proportions


I cannot begin to comprehend 1 comment



When a man


simply a man 1 comment


if at all one


grew in my mind


to something almost mythical 1 comment



An honourable and romantic creature.



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by illusion of what wasn't


as I was intent on feeding my imagination 2 comments


with my own lies



Right now


with no preamble


Smack-dab in daytime's harsh light



I realize



With not a small amount of glee 5 comments


your charms    


my make-believe


hold me in no thrall


not anymore not ever again



So here you stand


once more


Mere mortal


not even that



Quite reduced is my regard for you 1 comment



Now I see clearly



You are


bite-sized 1 comment


really



This is where I snatch you up


and chew


dwelling on the bitter


unsatisfying taste


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