Don Yarber Don Yarber
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If he is two armed and his upper left arm is missing then his ENTIRE left arm would be missing would it not?

Leonard a. Wronke Leonard a. Wronke
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no...Don, he is one of the four-armed creatures I introduced in a previous chapter. Do I need to restate this .

Don Yarber Don Yarber
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How can this person row if he doesn't have any arms? Or is this the same person previously described?

Leonard a. Wronke Leonard a. Wronke
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he is the one and the same. again do I need to restate what was written in a previous chapter regarding these creatures being four armed.

Jim Miller Jim Miller
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I don't think you need to restate it, Leonard. I don't know where Don is, but that's my "two cents worth". It's perfectly understandable to me.

Jim Miller Jim Miller
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How about the fourth sentence reading something like this..."I was taken as my ship was repelling boarders." Just a thought. It reads more smoothly to me.

Don Yarber Don Yarber
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A voice cannot be hidden. It can be silenced but not hidden. I would change this to ....stated the hidden person.

Leonard a. Wronke Leonard a. Wronke
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made the change...thank you for pointing this out.

Leonard a. Wronke Leonard a. Wronke
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thank you, Deborah, for the kind comment. all the way through this narrative I will attempt to keep the surprises flowing...this is my way of keeping this novel moving.

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Under the Double Star - Chapter Seven

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      As Athene was deposited hard upon the raider ship's deck by her captor, she heard
     his triumphant bellow. Before she could recover from being thrown down, a three-armed
     Levian brought his whip-dart up to snap across her shoulders, tearing the cloth
     above, the flesh below. The furrow it left caused her to cry out in immense pain.

          "Strip the Sapen. Take her below. Find a shackle for her amongst the others.
     Remove a "depleted" one if necessary. She will become one with the rest. All for
     the glory of TUR." the three-armed oar master commanded.

          As the oar master concluded speaking, two muscular Levians, roughly, picked
     Athene up. They commenced to tear her cloak, the clothes from her bleeding body.
     To add to her embarrassment, they dragged her to the open hatch, threw her thru the
     opening. Athene landed hard on the dark, dank deck below.
          After her crash, the two Levians, laughingly, went through the hatch to descend
     to the slave quarters below. They pulled her hair as a means to further torture her
     during the process of throwing her onto the empty bench. They completed her captivity
     by shackling her left ankle to the ring protruding from the floor.

          The blood loss causing her dizziness, badly bruised, defenseless, Athene
     wondered what was going to become of her. How long before Neith came after her? "

          In the semi-darkness to her left, Athene could barely make out the figure
     seated next to her. The form seemed out of focus. Misshapened. The arms looked out
     of alignment. Leaning closer, squinting, Athene realized why.

          The figure chained next to her was not a Sapen, rather a maimed, two-armed
     Levian,both, his lower right, upper left arms missing. His face devoid of one of his
          Before she could wonder how one of the members of her captors could be such
     as she, the mutilated Levian looked in her direction and declared, " Welcome aboard
     the "SCHEOL". 2 comments

          After the "VIRAGO" was under way, pursuing the raiders' vessel, Soru
     retreated to her cell, to contemplate how she came to be aboard the vessel.
          How she had left the security of the ALLIA cloister to seek her own way, in
     the temporal world, though she was younger than most who had left to seek their

          Her fortune to find a vessel that she could seek passage on. Could it be
     that here was her destiny?"

          In answer to the unspoken question that Athene's body language conveyed, her
    oar mate replied, "It is very simple. We row until we die. As long as we do, we
    stay alive." 4 comments

          Athene asked, further seeking clarification, "Is the only purpose of this
    vessel to kidnap and make slaves?"

          The Levian replied, No. The vessel is only a raider. It attacks, wins,
    plunders. All of the wretches you see here are the surviving members of all the
    ships that were attacked, looted, then sank. "

          Athene stated, " My ship was not plundered or sank. It was only attacked. I
    was taken while the ship I was on repelled all the boarders. I am hoping that we
    are being pursued." 1 comment

          The Levian, looking pensive for a moment, stated, " Aye, that may be true. We
    have not heard anything to tell otherwise. All the times before we would hear the
    "death throes" as  a captured vessel went under. There would be always be more
    than only one prisoner brought down here. "

          " Then, either this vessel's plans were altered or the captain decided
    against that action." Athene replied.

          A voice came from one of the benches behind Athene's, one she could not
     readily see amongst the shadows, momentarily startling her.

          " Aye, I have heard all of your conversation. There is an answer to your
     question, " stated the hidden person. 2 comments

          " You are correct about the vessel's action being changed. Except it wasn't
     the captain who made that change. He couldn't have. He's the one sitting next to
     you. " 2 comments

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