Zion Der hai Zion Der hai
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would go with the mood if it read"blood emptying from my vains...?"cause the way its written blood couldnt travel it would only empty out :)

Don Yarber Don Yarber
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scream used again in the last verse. This is one place I would keep the word "scream" if you change it in some of the other verses. Here is where you want the IMPACT to hit the reader.

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