Davide Castel Davide Castel
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I am making a few suggestions from my point of view, if that suits you?

Davide Castel Davide Castel
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suggestion "But I haven't yet revenged him.'

Davide Castel Davide Castel
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That she no longer loved you

Shaunna Harper Shaunna Harper
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Lovely stanza, I like it!

Don Yarber Don Yarber
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"Why "I" might have the same affliction??????

Davide Castel Davide Castel
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When your friend told you

Davide Castel Davide Castel
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"Why (I) might have... I agree with Don on this.

Don Yarber Don Yarber
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Coz is not a word. I would use the word "Because" If this were dialogue, Coz might be OK but not here.

Davide Castel Davide Castel
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Because should be the word. You are right Don. "Why, I haven't(had/eaten)...

Davide Castel Davide Castel
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When you knew nothing But hallucinations (not necessary to include..and all--)

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Silence Speaks the Loudest


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There are moments in life that silence has spoken the loudest. What moment/s did it speak to you or someone you know.


When mother told you
That our father died
I saw how you reacted:
"Why, I haven't done my
Revenge (?) yet."
Silence.
It spoke the loudest
When you knew that
It was over and done with.
Hatred no more. 3 comments


When your sweetheart told you
That she no longer felt in love
With you.
I knew how you felt that moment:
"Why, I haven't shown the world
How much I loved you."
Silence.
It spoke the loudest
When you felt that
It was over and done with.
Illusion no more. 2 comments


When friend of yours told you
That he was HIV-positive
I saw how you cringed:
"Why, might have the same affliction."
Silence.
It spoke the loudest
When you knew that
It was over and done with.
Dream no more. 4 comments


When a street urchin approached you
'Coz he had not eaten for days
I saw how you insulted his sad plight:
"Why, I haven't taken lunch or dinner
Been on drugs, liquors and marijuana."
Silence.
It spoke the loudest
When you knew nothing
But hallucinations and all--
It was over and done with.
Live no more. 5 comments


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