Warren Gates Warren Gates
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rain hides the tears should they ever decide to fall is such a cool thought!

Davide Castel Davide Castel
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things(.) (Delete full-stop))

Davide Castel Davide Castel
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It fell. In love. And died. Did you mean for the fullstops to be there?

Summer Breeze Summer Breeze
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Yes, all of them were deliberate.

Davide Castel Davide Castel
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Too many full-stops again, unless that is how you meant for the poem to read?

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Did The Sun Go Out?


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We really need a category for FAILED Romance. You'll see what I mean. I wrote this a while back, and you know me, I write like I think...


Did the sun go out, or is there a film across the world?
Where did all the colours go?
I could have sworn they were here not long ago...
Oh well, it doesn't matter. I would rather have rain anyway.
Rain demands no smiles. It is grey, and soothing somehow.
It hides my tears...should they ever decide to fall. 2 comments


My chest feels hollow. So empty.
I know it should hurt or something but there is just...nothing.
Not even a heartbeat.
I guess you took it with you when you left. Yes...that must be it.
Or it fell out...
Perhaps I should check the ground.
No...it's not there either. Huh.


I have stuff to do, I think.
And maybe I should eat sometime today.
Should....
Should...
Should do a lot of things. I'm supposed to. People tell me to.
When they give me those concerned looks.
Or those impatient ones that seem to say "Where's your pride?"
It fell. In love. And died.
Can't they see that? No... I guess not. 4 comments


Perhaps my heart's in my pocket?
(Chuckle) How silly, it wouldn't be there. And yet...
No. It's not. All that's in there is...
this. 2 comments


No.
No, don't look!
Too late - oh God, why did I look?
I forgot I left that little keepsake in there,
took it with me everywhere to remind me of you!
And it does, oh God, it does!
And my heart IS still in my chest, because here comes the pain -
the agony that I didn't want to face.


You left me!
You LEFT me!
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!


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