Daniel Sintos Daniel Sintos
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Wouldn't it be better to use laugh instead of laughter? It would fit better with the list of verbs.

Don Yarber Don Yarber
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It might fit better with the list of verbs but would certainly mess up the rhythm.

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soul mates

The incurable romantic in me surfaces again

It all began like a story book line
A fairy tale start, "Once upon a time"
Dinner for two, table by the sea,
Sailboats drifting away like me.
A pleasant drink by a fireside
A gentle kiss like an evening tide.

Sea gulls calling on salty breeze
Shadows falling from tall palm trees
Cold hearts melting like summer snow
Two minds wondering which way to go.
Silently screaming like sea gulls calling
Violently dreaming like shadows falling.

But fairy tales and story books
Are words alone and never looks
Or smiles or glances, laughter, sighs,
Or seeing yourself through another's eyes.
And sailboats drifting away to sea
Are sometimes lost for eternity. 2 comments

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