Daniel Bird Daniel Bird
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" - Of course he loved me, and in the instant that our lips met, I knew that I loved him, too. In that moment, everything he’d ever said to me or done for me, every moment we’d ever spent together suddenly shone with the light of the new perspective this revelation had lent me. - " Excellent writing Rebekah!

Arien Mills Arien Mills
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Just a little grammar fix:) Your last sentence in this paragraph is a slight run-on. Maybe you could make it like this, "I forgot about the others standing on the cliff watching; I forgot about the danger and the mission lying ahead. All I focused on was him and the way his lips moved with mine."

Arien Mills Arien Mills
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I LOVE the imagery formed there, but it's impossible for a human to fall 200 feet into water without dying, no matter how deep it is. At 100 feet the water becomes basically cement due to the surface tension. So perhaps you could make it, like, 80 feet or something? Still very intense, and also more realistic?

Rebekah King Rebekah King
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Ah but here's the thing, the character this is about is not human.

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“Wait,” His voice sounded behind me.


I faced him and was about to respond when he spoke again.


“Will I see you again?” His voice was sad and, strangely, nervous.


This was a difficult question for me to answer – I wanted so much to tell him yes, but I didn’t want to give him false hope either. I tried to keep my expression neutral as I spoke.


“When I find the civilians, they’re gonna need extraction,” I turned back towards the open air beyond the cliff’s edge and settled on the truth. “Probably not, no.”


“Then I’ll never get the chance to live this down.”


I turned around to ask him what the hell he meant, but before the question could form on my lips, he pulled me close to him and silenced me by pressing his mouth to mine. I was shocked, stunned, in total disbelief at his actions. What was happening here? Could it really be possible? That he had loved me all this time, but never had the courage, or perhaps the heart, to show it? He was like a brother to me and it had always been inconceivable that he would be anything more. Impossible, unthinkable.


How could I have been kidding myself for so long?


Of course he loved me, and in the instant that our lips met, I knew that I loved him, too. In that moment, everything he’d ever said to me or done for me, every moment we’d ever spent together suddenly shone with the light of the new perspective this revelation had lent me. All the little things we’d done and all the little reactions to them suddenly had a vast wealth of meaning. The way I smiled when his lips lingered as he kissed my forehead, the way he laughed when I rolled my eyes at something he said, even the way he looked at me when he thought I couldn’t see him – all of it made perfect sense. 1 comment


It took me all of a second to reach these conclusions in my mind before I was kissing him back with as much passion as I had in me. I’d been lying to myself for so long that it now felt good to let loose and show him just how much I knew I loved him. As we shared this moment together, I felt how much restraint it had taken him to hold back until now, and I knew now it had taken me the same. I forgot about the others standing on the cliff watching, I forgot about the danger and the mission lying ahead. All I focused on was him and the way his lips moved with mine. 1 comment


As perfect and liberating as the moment was, I knew it had to end – I had a duty to perform now. So with a last touch of our lips, I broke away from him and started walking backwards. I wanted to tell him I loved him, but I felt that somehow he already knew. So instead, I backed to the edge of the cliff, still facing him and stared deep into his eyes.


“Goodbye,” I said, before disappearing backwards over the edge and letting my body go into free-fall.


The cliff was a good 200 feet high, but I knew the river was deep enough to break my fall without causing me injury. And my sharp eyes detected the perfect spot to land before I closed them and sucked in a deep breath through my nose. I felt the impact jolt through my system as I crashed through the surface into the depths below. The currant was slow and I oriented myself and swam back up the six or so feet I’d plummeted with ease. As I broke the surface, I drew in a breath of the cold air gratefully. I turned my head until my eyes detected the shore opposite the cliff and I started swimming towards it. 2 comments


Eventually I saw the sand beneath me and found it with my feet and waded through the water until I reached the shore. I searched the forest before me with my eyes and saw an animal trail which would grant me a relatively noiseless path. I turned back around to face the cliff; it looked even more domineering from this end. It was difficult to believe I’d just jumped that height. My eyes continued searching for the top of the cliff until they rested upon the six figures standing on the edge, looking down at me. My brain acknowledged each of them, but my heart strove for the one. I looked into his saddened eyes and nodded my head in a gesture of farewell, before turning and disappearing into the trees.


I will never forget that moment. Not as long as I live.


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