Dazzy Blue Dazzy Blue
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God on holiday.Great line

Warren Gates Warren Gates
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I have an old photo of the subject from the 1980s . on a beach in NZ & it is exactly what he looks like:)

Warren Gates Warren Gates
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I am smiling reading these comments, it is so nice to have someone take an interest in my lyrics. The old photo of my friend inspired me to write this, when he was struggling to put his life back together and I lost touch with him for a too long of a while.

Jim Miller Jim Miller
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I like your chorus, especially the starting line, "I'd like to shaake you Until I feel your heart again."

Warren Gates Warren Gates
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Thank you, Jim. This song was written when my own heart was very bleak.

John Ramsbottom John Ramsbottom
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Play more with the metaphysical.I mean the moon being for love or madnes the stars suggesting astrology and predictions or northern star as a guidance in dark times in your life's journey.

John Ramsbottom John Ramsbottom
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I like the chorus shame damn isn't 'you left me in pain' to rhyme with again or have three words with ain like pain again and ........?

Warren Gates Warren Gates
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this is all specifically personal, to and about a certain person, who is recovering from a serious trauma. I do so much appreciate your upbeat suggestions1

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You are standing in the sun
Stealing all the rays
Looking like a god on holiday
A sad indifference fills your eyes
You walk away without goodbyes
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You don’t need to know someone like me
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I’d like to shake you
Until I feel your heart again
Then take you to a place
Where maybe we will start again
It’s lonely where I am
In the dark out of control
And you don’t give a
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mn

You are racing against the wind
A tempest in your mind
Falling like a legend out of time
Life’s illusions lost their grace
The whole wide world is out of place
I know that you won’t hear me from the shadows
You don’t need to know how much I care
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I’d like to shake you
Until I feel your heart again
Then take you to a place
Where maybe we will start again
It’s lonely where I am
In the dark out of control
And you don’t give a damn.
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