John Ramsbottom John Ramsbottom
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Its interesting how these last two stanzas don't have the same AABB rhyme pattern which makes them stand out and her and the poem to come alive defiant to smile and get on with living

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Broken dreams


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White dress, sunken eyes
      
       She hopes her lack of reality will cause a disguise


       Maybe she's insane or just a tad bit off


       She falls back on the chipped brick and sighs with a cough



       I'm sure she's alright, she's fine


       Her soul is broken but still shines


       She feels the winter, the bitter cold
      
       No mittens or coat, she is sold



       She wants a friend


       She wants a home


       She's lonely and broken 2 comments


       But still smiles


      
       Fore the tinted smirk plastered on her face


       Allows her to pretend she's alive


       To pretend she's awake


       And live the life she dreamed


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