Cindy Beitinger Cindy Beitinger
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it's interesting, you say... "crime on your foot", I would say "crime on our hands" (only an observation)

John Ramsbottom John Ramsbottom
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got a bit muddled what you mean here

Manya Mishra Manya Mishra
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Here, I mean to say that when we or the one whom we care of is/are the victim, we really get upset. If we see the whole scenario of the poem, i also refer to the fact that we only care of ourselves and not others, we should change that thinking.

Cindy Beitinger Cindy Beitinger
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When you say, "the people belonging to us" (do you mean family?) and "when we are the suffering party" maybe say, "when we are the suffering one" The last two lines could be re-worked to say: "An urge for revenge erupts from within"

John Ramsbottom John Ramsbottom
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is victim singular or are we all victims by receiving or crime or worse not saying OR doing something to prevent it.

Manya Mishra Manya Mishra
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There is only one victim. But as a nation, we all suffer.

Cindy Beitinger Cindy Beitinger
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These are just suggestions... Crime owns one whole territory Crime needs to crumble for peace and humanity to grow (Manya, I do not wish to change your words, I'm only showing another way to convey your message)

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India has recently been under a crime. The worst one could imagine.


There will be a day,
You’ll wake up from your dreams,
Happy, secure and pleasant,
They seem.


And you will realize that there is crime,
Crime on your foot
And crime all over the room.
It’s easy to see others in pain,
Who don’t bother,
But still are they worth?
Worth of being the victim? 1 comment


When we are in the place,
The people belonging us,
Or even the ones who matter much!
When we are the suffering party,
It really knocks the daylight
From our lives.
And gets the factor of REVENGE,
Erupting within us. 3 comments


Crime is the one whole territory,
Which needs to explode,
For peace and humanity
To approach.
It’s a difficult task,
It doesn’t need money or power,
The only thing- UNITY
Is a must
Let’s keep up the spirit.
FOR THE UNDESERVING VICTIM!
CRIME: The latest beast, wanting to be FINISHED, KILLED and We will FINISH AND KILL it!!! 3 comments


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