Benjamin Crosby Benjamin Crosby
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'I see the earth in peculiar ways' is a great introductory line. And 'A simple smile of the strangers/A pleasant nod from far away' are beautiful visual insights. Great stanza, Elle.

Elle Park Elle Park
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Thank you very much:)

Davide Castel Davide Castel
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I like this description. So many trees, sizes and shapes. Nature is beautiful.

Elle Park Elle Park
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Thank you, I tried to capture detail within the poem.

John Ramsbottom John Ramsbottom
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I liked the choice of word as architecture suggesting perhaps nature as one grand design

John Ramsbottom John Ramsbottom
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This stanzas rhymes line 2 and 4 well but I don't know what you mean?

Elle Park Elle Park
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I guess what I was meaning was, despite doing everything you have "shown" life has still somehow managed to take away what you've deserved.

Davide Castel Davide Castel
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Yes, 'sink or swim' and 'If you don't laugh, you cry'.

Warren Gates Warren Gates
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Yep!! We have to keep on keeping on!

John Ramsbottom John Ramsbottom
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anguish or endure regret? dark dream if you endure pain,give up or go insane weren't there others who got on with it and enjoyed life? I hope so

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I trace the raindrops on my window


       I see the earth in peculiar ways


       A simple smile of the strangers 2 comments


       A pleasant nod from far away



       The architecture of the trees 4 comments


       And the piercing wind at night


       I hear the dreams of many


       As the embers burn bright



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       As others endure the pain


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       While others remain sane 3 comments


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