Davide Castel Davide Castel
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god should be (God) always use capitals for Him.

Leslie Blackwell Leslie Blackwell
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God is a proper noun and requires an uppercase first letter. If your were referring to a god then it would be okay to use the lowercase.

Deborah Boydston Deborah Boydston
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Maybe this is just me but did you forget a word in this sentence: I calmly continued surveying the room as (I)eased myself into the fresh clothing.

Davide Castel Davide Castel
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a suggestion: that I had forgotten (or) that I nearly forgot.

Maurice Trevino Maurice Trevino
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Fixed and fixed.. thank you!

Deborah Boydston Deborah Boydston
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Same thing with this sentence. Did you forget the word I or was it intentional: Just as quickly as (I) engaged the strange blue sphere I was now in some way mentally connected to it.

Warren Gates Warren Gates
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This is a good ending, but with the possibility to continue.

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Out of pure boredom. This is my first submission to the site. Please give feedback and general thoughts. I'm no writer by any means, but I've always had what I believe to be a decent imagination. If anyone at all likes the story so far, I may even see where it goes. Cheers.


A bright light. Bewildering radiance like nothing I have ever experienced before. This was his soul, emitting his pureness upon my eyes. I knew that I had never physically met him before yet somehow in his presence I was overwhelmed with a comfort and familiarity. It was as if I had known him for all eternity but it had happened in a single glance. This was the only way to describe what I felt in that moment. Meeting God. That was the only title I knew to give the sentient being that stood before me. He was in human form yet he was not human. 3 comments


I took the linen that he held before me and as I did his hand brushed mine. For that single solitary moment we were connected, his thoughts were transferred to me. This was not God. At least not the God that you hear about on Sunday morning. No this was someone or something else very different. Although I knew that this being was not the "God" that had been beaten into my conscience, I knew that this being and his kind were responsible for the existence of mankind.


I walked down a long corridor and entered a room. Everything in this vessel was void of color and this particular room was no different. I pictured the other rooms of the ship all looking just as this one did. White walls and floors. Cold grey metallic looking strips ran along the walls and around pieces of cold shiny furniture. It seemed to be a theme. Sterile. That's how I would describe the room I was in, sterile. There was a bed or some sort of padded structure in the corner. There weren't any windows. The room was near the center of the ship so I'm not sure if it was just a coincidence or if all the rooms enjoyed the same view as mine. None.


I clutched the folded linens close to my naked body. I had been in such a hypnotic state that I had nearly forgotten that I was currently disrobed. Even stranger still I almost got the sense that it wasn't important. As I made my way to the room I don't recall any of the ships crew giving me a second glance in fact. What was this place, these people? How had they made me feel so indifferent about something I would normally find very uncomfortable? I placed the folded white shirt and pants on the bed. I calmly continued surveying the room as I eased myself into the fresh clothing. It was soft and white of course. The material was like nothing I had ever felt before. It wasn't cotton, and it wasn't silk but it was extremely soft. Another mystery. They were quickly piling up. 3 comments


I couldn't remember why I was aboard this ship or even what it looked like from the outside. I strained trying to remember what events had unfolded that had lead me to this point. It was useless. I stand there leaning against the bed rubbing the side of my head and looking across the room. There was a small table in the opposite corner of the room. I walked over and sat in one of the strange chairs that surrounded it.


At the center of the table was a sphere. It seemed to be the only object in the room that wasn't colorless. This intrigued me. The sphere emitted a strange blue light. It moved yet it made no detectable sound. It looked wet as though it were seated in water or some sort of liquid from underneath. I couldn't control my urge to touch it and I slowly leaned forward. First one finger grazed the smooth wet sphere then the rest followed without a second thought. Just as quickly as I engaged the strange blue sphere I was now in some way mentally connected to it. A feeling of wholeness came over my body. It was as if this floating ball was a lost limb that had miraculously been reconnected. It was a part of me. My mind raced. The ball was not a ball at all, in fact it was some sort of bio-engineered substance that allowed me to upload and download information. That's the only way I can describe the sensation that ran over me. 2 comments


Suddenly I was able to access information but it wasn't like any computer I had known before. This information was instantly uploaded to my brain. As quick as I could come up with a question the answer would be embedded into my psyche. Everything was happening so fast I couldn't control it. My eyes rolled backwards into my head and my teeth began to chatter. It was quite obvious that touching this thing was a dangerous mistake. The door slid open and two figures walked in. They removed me from the mechanism. My vision was blurred as tears ran down my cheeks. I was gently laid atop the bed and the room went dark as my mind shut down. 1 comment


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