Harry Wells Harry Wells
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This is a powerful piece of writing with some well- thought out philosophies of life. Your first paragraph is very sensitive. The split infinitive 'to even imagine of separation' could be replaced by the correct 'even to imagine a separation'. There are some clumsy phrases but I will not point them out unless you wish me to do so.

Veena Ramesh Veena Ramesh
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Thanks Harry.Yes your corrections and suggestions are most welcome,I am just an amateur and still in the learning process.So please do give me feedback:)

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I thought I lost him forever.It was a painful moment for me to even imagine of separation of thoughts with him.The loss referred to here is not the physical absence but loss in terms of absence of togetherness,absence of sharing,absence of words,absence of communication and also detachment the worst fear i always carried with me. 2 comments



The loss of bonding haunts you like a hollowness created within your soul.My soul always asks for more love and more care and strong relationships.I ponder over things which once seemed irreparable now doesn't appear to be as big as the rock.



Ego and difference of opinions on certain matters could be the reasons behind the loss of relationship.This loss moves with time and gradually becomes a memory of the past sweet and bitter memories and I try  to cherish only the good memories with him.



But its inevitable for us to move on in life and on the same lines I  consider my life as a play and I need to continue with my character as 'Life is still Beautiful"and so be a part of it with few losses and few gains.


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