Asma Ahsan Asma Ahsan
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One more suggestion. :) Maybe you could make this BOLD. I just like this poem so much I want to see it look perfect. :)

Harry Wells Harry Wells
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'Wet water' is tautological (saying it twice). Water can't be anything else but wet. Don't you think you mean 'too near'

Asma Ahsan Asma Ahsan
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The use of nature is always a very strong medium in a poem. The green scarf just blends in with the trees. Nice touch.

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She stands unabashedly naked among the trees,
except for a green silk scarf that billows about her knees.
Confident and carefree, she wills her lover to look her way  
as trickles of water cascade down the curves of her soft body.
He must get closer; her aura speaks to him like no other. 1 comment

The silk scarf moves across her body,
leaving ringlets of cold water
His fingertips trace the path of water,
leaving behind a trail of heat that can only get hotter.
She melts into his touch with a sigh of exhilaration;
nature’s cold and lover’s heat take her body higher.
Time becomes a mist that is lost in desire,
as two lovers bodies meet in a kiss of hot fire. 2 comments

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