Harry Wells Harry Wells
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'was waiting for him'

Harry Wells Harry Wells
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Nit picking I know but perhaps the title should be Horror Boomeranged. Probably a typo.

Davide Castel Davide Castel
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I think it should be tomato 'ketchup'

Harry Wells Harry Wells
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Catchup is a proper variant of ketchup particularly in America.

Davide Castel Davide Castel
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Really? I've only known one spelling. However, never having used it, I could be wrong. Here we have tomato sauce.

Harry Wells Harry Wells
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That's what the dictionary says.

Harry Wells Harry Wells
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See no blood - capital letter for 'see'.

Indira Mukherjee Indira Mukherjee
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Thanks, you are very helpful. Corrected.

Harry Wells Harry Wells
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'Watch this' and she took out a knife,'. Without the word 'she' this sentence has no subject.

Harry Wells Harry Wells
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and he took the knife from her hand.

Harry Wells Harry Wells
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I think this above makes it a little clearer.

Indira Mukherjee Indira Mukherjee
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Thanks Harry, now I understand.

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Horror Boomranged


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She had a friend.

My friends found my first horror story humourous . So I tried again.


She wanted to scare her husband and was waiting for him well prepared. 3 comments


As he entered his bedroom, he saw his wife, with a glass full of blood, her face smeared with blood, laughing frenziedly .


" So you want to scare me" he thought.


" You can't scare me with all this tomato catchup or whatever it is." He said loudly. 4 comments


'Okay ,you are not scared ? Watch this" and took out a knife ,cut her forearm and said- " See no blood, ghosts don't bleed." 3 comments


He laughed- " I know all these magic tricks, see" and he took knife from her hand . 3 comments


Holding his hair with one hand, he sliced his neck with a clean sweep and said-


" See ! No blood." 1 comment


She fainted.


Hi friends, horror again, but I was struggling with the title. Any suggestion to improve are welcomed.


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