Leonard a. Wronke Leonard a. Wronke
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I made a change hope it flows better, Deborah.

Deborah Boydston Deborah Boydston
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I really like the concept you added to F'isa's character of the multiple lives she has.

Leonard a. Wronke Leonard a. Wronke
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again, thank you, for seeing that I have tried to keep up the continuity.

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Under the Double Star - Chapter Thirty-Three

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And Fernando Makes Three -Part One Ira Furor Brevis Est

      In the blink of an eye, Neith's world became askew.

     Where only a moment before, she was standing along side her transformed sister

prepared to aid in the Primae's defense against the shadows that had appeared from

nowhere. Now, she had dropped her cutlass, grabbed her own head in a spasm of pain

to find herself prone on her back staring at the cell's ceiling.

     What made this situation even worse was besides being  paralyzed, she was 1 comment

hearing and sensing the voices of others in her head.

     One of the voices was the Primae attempting to keep the Leukan, F'lisa calm and

in control of herself.

      The second, so far, unidentified, was one of taunt. This voice kept repeating

that Neith  was but a pawn; a means to the end of the Primae.

     The third was not so much vocal but a sensation of another presence. It was this

unknown that made Neith feel it to be the most unpredictable.

     Neith attempted to break the paralysis gripping her, to no avail. She felt her

life was being taken from her. Also, she knew there was not one thing she could do

about it or anyone to assist her.

     The Primae was too occupied with F'lisa keeping the Leukan safe.

     The two Keths were nowhere in her sight.

     Soru was engaged in her own battle.  

     Who could help free her from being paralyzed; save her from an untimely death.

     Neith could sense someone was next to her but she could not turn her head to

see who it was. She could only hope this person was here to help.

     A roar of rage came in reply.

     F'lisa was, momentarily, relieved from the assault of the three forces that were

bearing down on her.

      As she thought she could not withstand all three much longer, the least one

departed from her mind.

       As this least one disengaged from her mind it said, "Do not fear. Even

though I must depart from you at this moment, you will be just fine. If possible, I

will return if what I am about to do fails."

      This sensation no sooner finished speaking when F'lisa felt the pressure upon

her psyche intensify. It felt so intense that F'lisa was sure that another one of her

deaths would be activated. 2 comments

     She hoped the Primae's promise to keep her safe would be honored.

     However she did know that she was but a diversion for the real battle that was

sure to come.

     Her only wish  was to remain long enough  to fulfill her part.

     The pain she felt continued in intensity until she was sure she would, truly, die


     As her second death was about to commence, F'lisa felt it, suddenly, subside. The

pressure on her psyche abated, then stopped completely. The only sensations she had,

now, were the normal everyday ones she, usually, felt.

     After she collected herself, she  thought to herself, " What, now. Is it over?"

     Her answer was just about to be revealed.

     Idon realized what THE SHADOWS were trying to hide.

     He had witnessed this phenomenon before when he had been aligned with the

CHTHNONIANS instead of their captive. It was an old, CHTHNONIAN method of distraction.

     While he had been contemplating what this distraction was hiding he saw Neith

as she dropped her cutlass, grabbed her head in a gesture of pain, then she fell upon

the cell floor.

     It did not take much thought to realize what was about to unfold.

     Idon ran towards Neith, fighting with his two remaining arms against THE SHADOWS

until he reached Neith's side.

     Upon his arrival next to her, he saw the state of paralysis she was enduring.

     Idon glanced around the cell until he caught sight of the CHTHNONIAN. It was the

CHTHNONIAN's severe look of concentration that made Idon realize that it was this

action that was causing Neith's pain and paralysis.

     It was this realization that had Idon let out a savage roar of rage.

     Idon followed this utterance with a charging run towards the CHTHNONIAN.

     As he ran forward, he beseeched his god, Tur, for the opportunity to repay

Neith's kindness to him when she gave him back, both, his ship and his dignity.

    Idon only hoped he was in time.

    Soon, he would find out just how high a price he would have to repay.

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