Leslie Blackwell Leslie Blackwell
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maybe Last shot taken would read better. Subject before the action.

Leslie Blackwell Leslie Blackwell
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suggestion: "only the now" would be an interesting alternative.

Leslie Blackwell Leslie Blackwell
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Never mind. Can't win them all.

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       one moment, tension mounts


              
              no more time


      
       only now 1 comment



rubber disk, velocity increasing,



       misses net…



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