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I imagine this reads well when read elegantly, languidly, and slowly. But what if it's rushed? I guess... I don't write a lot of scripts, but you might consider what it would sound like read by different people you know to see if you think it needs any changes.

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I relate to Keiran's spunk here.

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Keiran [famed Dark Angel philosopher]: I watch you day by day. You puzzle me, bewilder me, and fascinate me. You infuriate me with your simple compassion. You have such a gift, such a power, simmering beneath the surface, building, waiting to be released. Yet you do all you can to contain it and use it for a higher purpose. Why? I’ve asked myself this 841,592,003 times as I’ve watched, observed, and tried to learn from you. Yet still, I do not understand. 1 comment


What is it that drives you so in your soft fierceness? You truly are a contradiction, my little warrior. You go into the streets, with human-like fear, of something unknown, to help those…inferior to you and me. For they could not compare to our powers or beauty, yet you are still compelled to go and help them. Again, I question your motives and get no answers.


And what do truly you fear, little darkling? The power within you? Do not fear it. Embrace it. It is your birthright. Suppressing it does no good. Trying to atone for the sins of the rest of us through your actions won’t work either. So you resigned to your fate. Come, join me and learn of the dark power within.


(Keiran extends his hand.)


Eliora [Dark Angel-turned champion]: (gasps) Never! As long as hope sparks into flame, I will continue to reach for the light. I’ve seen for too long what the darkness has done to our race. (Light sparks in her eyes)

Keiran: You think you’ve seen darkness? (arches an eyebrow and bunches his jaw)


Eliora: (looks suspiciously at him and nods) I’ve seen enough darkness to last a lifetime.


Keiran: How about two or three? (He grabs Eliora and pulls her into the folds of his wings) Maybe four, five, six, or seven. (He begins violently flapping his previously concealed wings, taking out of the astronomy tower.)

(Eliora screams as they make the trip.)


Eliora: Where are you taking me, Keiran?!


Keiran: To show you my darkness:  my nightmares. (He glances down at Eliora’s face.)


(Eliora watches the scenes that play out before her in the sky, the mountains, on the plains, on the hills, and the fields like slideshows. They're all moving picture shows of her.)


Eliora: What…what is all of this? (She turned to look at him.)


Keiran: My nightmares. (He closed his eyes, trying to block it all out.)


Eliora: These are your nightmares? (gestures to the images)


Keiran: (not opening his eyes) Yes, you haunt me, every single minute of every hour. You are my darkness. 1 comment


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