Davide Castel Davide Castel
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Should there be another (?) after line 2?

Davide Castel Davide Castel
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I would join the last 2 paragraphs to conform with the rest of this verse. Unless you did intend it to be this way?

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Tell me..
Tell me how I can help you.
Not just stay by and witness you rip your mind apart.
Seeing your hurt, it stings at my heart.
You turn away from everyone
But that really doesn't mean I'm done
Done trying?
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I see the pain hidden in your eyes.
Let me into your heart, I see
You wear that well-formed disguise,
But not around me.
I'll understand your soul when no one else will
Even though you no longer want me,
I'm here still.

Don't lock those chains
Let me wrap my twisted mind around yours.
Don't stay behind closed doors.

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With what love I can offer.
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