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Help wanted please!

I am writing a fantasy thriller called, 'The Adventures of the Capricorn Bugs' in which 13 children are born in the same village, under unusual circumstances. These children possess extraordinary gifted talents. They are all GOOD children, not evil. I have completed all of their background circumstances from childhood and they are now in college.
One year later, There is an unusual moon, and the children change and become 'The Luna Bugs' and that is where I am stuck for ideas.

Any help would be appreciated.


Davide Castel

20th May 2012


Lucy, without some insight into their background(s), how can we, of this community, help you.


Leonard a. Wronke

19th May 2012


watch Children of the Corn? lol


Jordan Newman

19th May 2012


^^ Jordan she said GOOD not evil.
Since in my characters, morality is a bit of a grey area, I don't know if I can help much...


Jason Dookeran

19th May 2012


hey lucy does that mean that their gifted talents revolve around the moon?


Karen Gomez

19th May 2012


Thanks to all...So far I had written over 3,000 words, but I had started this story about 8 years ago, so now I want to finish it. Thanks to being on this site where I have felt motivated again.

This story has shades of 'Children of the Damned' but with many talented gifts, but GOOD as I said. Not evil. And perhaps some of Enid Blyton of the 'Famous Five.'

The Moon is something that has just come up, because here in my city, we have just experienced the 'Perigee' Moon phase, which means the moon is brightest, reddish and biggest when closest to the earth, and I even managed to photograph it from our backyard, hence my ideas of the Moon. I would like the moon to have some sort of effect on the children, like change them to the extreme, so that they make some difference in the world.

It is not really science fiction, but more of how children/people can make some difference and then others can benefit from seeing all of this. Make Sense?

Sure I could post some in sections, but it is more like a fable type of story.

Again thanks for any suggestions.


Davide Castel

20th May 2012


how about as the moon changes phase they become more aggressive/passive. Like their abilities may be more/less potent, powerful? Or maybe their abilities start whispering evil things to them?


Jason Dookeran

20th May 2012


I like your story idea Lucy!

I had an idea for the transformation that these children take on from the effects of the moon;

What if they become guardians of some kind? They might, like the moon, only appear at night to protect the world from any evil that could endanger the daytime. Their unique skills could have progressed so that they are better equipped to fight the new challenges they must face in the night time. I like the idea that their powers/names change as they approach a new stage of life, it's very symbolic.

Anyway hope that helps a little! :)


Leoni Carlson

20th May 2012


Thank you Jason and Leoni.

You certainly have given me some ideas and I was actually thinking along those lines too, now I need the inspiration and the time, to knuckle down and put something on paper!
My problem is that if there was only one main character, there would be no problem, but with 13, it could get complicated.

You see the 13 Capricorn bugs are actually my 'hobbies' and so the children are called, as an example:-

Competition Candy
Cooking Colin (twins)

Dream Dolly
Healthy Heather
Jitter Jane (triplets)

Millennium Mike
Music Marc (twins)

Reading Rennie
Shutter Sue (twins

Spiritual Sally

Travel Tom

Working Wally
Writing Wanda (twins)

Hmmmm!!! Hope this hasn't turned you all off?


Davide Castel

21st May 2012


lucy, could you further explain these names and why you picked them. except for the two singular names it looks like the malady(?) that is making these people special affects multiple siblings....again, why is that.


Leonard a. Wronke

20th May 2012


Lucy: I think the names you have chosen reflect various portions of your OWN personality. I can see that in the names. As far as help with the plot, or an idea, I'm afraid I will have to pass, unless these people are all just one person who is afflicted with multiple personalities.


Don Yarber

20th May 2012


Thanks Leonard and Don. No Don, not one person with multiple personalities, but 13 actual children.

Sorry! I didn't mean to open a 'Can of worms,' as I seem to have complicated matters with this 'fixation' of mine, but I really only wanted a few suggestions for the next part of my story.

However, I can see that I went about it the wrong way, so I probably should post the first part. That was where and how it all started, in the fictional town of 'Sunflowers.' It is just that I thought this story might be too childish for this site. You see I have formatted the first two chapters, with pictures, for the visual effect,(it is meant to be a picture story book) so cannot obviously post it here in its complete form.

I have had some great suggestions from Leoni and Jason though, they have given me the ideas that I had in the back of my mind.


Davide Castel

21st May 2012


Just to let you all know...That this story book is dragging on a bit...But I have got to the complicated part now, towards the final conclusion. I just need the motivation and time!!!


Davide Castel

23rd March 2013


Okay so as I see it, you've already more or less revealed what talents they may have. Perhaps the moon brings their talents to a climax. (they have their greatest successes) For instance, the cooking candy twins may reveal some incredible magic candy to the world. Dream Dolly is able to offer some incredible insight to one of the 13. Perhaps all of them meet on the night of the full moon and their meeting has some great (positive)impact on the world. Maybe a circus?
Candy, Music, Dancing, etc. (all of their talents revealed in one fantastic show/event)


Cindy Beitinger

23rd March 2013


Cindy...I so appreciate your positive feedback.
However, I have myself twisted in a tight little knot.
You always seem to find some way out for your characters.
I will keep trying!
I do like your suggestions.
Thank you once again.


Davide Castel

23rd March 2013


I will add later. Too tired now. :)


Asma Ahsan

24th March 2013


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