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I want your feedback please.

I wrote a story called 'Beyond Being' which was close to my heart. However, I didn't get many responses or feedbacks, so I took it off this site.
Then again this year, I have reposted, to see if maybe some of the newbie's might comment.
Again, I had not much joy.
I really would appreciate your thoughts on this story. Pretty please?


Davide Castel

29th May 2013


Written by Lucy Rupena, a short story, in the General, Philosophical and Religious category. It received 188 views since being posted on the 22nd of May, 2013.

Can be read here: http://www.scribeslice.com/write/index/4697/Beyond-Being/10/0

Hmm, today is the 28th of May - The file was read 188 times in 6 days and the DIVA complains.

What is the world coming to? (Asma shakes her head in sheer disbelief and looks sad.)

:( (sad face icon).


Asma Ahsan

29th May 2013


ASMA...I think that when you say 188 views, WOW! it doesn't necessarily mean that people have read it. Probably 100 views were mine, as I changed the structure a few times and it records it as viewed. Or maybe people did view but didn't read or comment.
I just needed people's opinions that's all.
I realise that what may be close to my heart may not necessarily be of interest to all readers.
So be it. I am just speaking my mind here. No, I don't get offended, but I am one curious person who sometimes needs opinions. Not always, mind you.
I'm no DIVA, far from it. I now feel foolish and embarrassed.


Davide Castel

29th May 2013


I read your story and liked it, Lucy. I just don't always recommend comment on, or discuss every piece. I know it's hard when you particularly like a story that you've worked on, but it doesn't get as much feedback as you like.

I thought it was very well written, so didn't need any corrections. Hope you get what your seeking.


Jim Miller

29th May 2013


Ok - first, you are the nicest person I know,, and with real low self esteem, so please dont feel foolish.


Second, when you check your own page, the view doesnt count it. At least, not that I know of. so 188 means the number of people who came in this page.

It's an excellent story. ScribeSlice is slowly expanding its readership so your work will be read more as time goes by. It takes time for people to sit and read but at least they know its out there to have a read through in their free time.

Relax and write a new thing now. Be INSPIRED. :)


Asma Ahsan

29th May 2013


Once you make change. Save it. Let the page reload on its own. Clear your internet cache memory. Maybe your machine is too clogged up.

MAY the force be with you Lucy - a bit of a typo there. :)


Asma Ahsan

29th May 2013


Jim...I thank you for reading and commenting. I don't like to pressure people in reading, but I thought that maybe the readers out there would get something out of this read.


Davide Castel

3rd June 2013


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