Leslie Blackwell Leslie Blackwell
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off to a funny start. LOL

Leslie Blackwell Leslie Blackwell
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needs a little work here. First line reads a bit awkwardly, but can't think of any alternatives to suggest.

Leslie Blackwell Leslie Blackwell
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would probably be better to continue with same rhyming scheme throughout but its your poem.

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