Leonard a. Wronke Leonard a. Wronke
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to make this story greater should change IT to HIM in keeping with subject matter.

Jordan Hewitt Jordan Hewitt
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No I think it should be HE not HIM. But I think IT is just perfect. He says he's a slave to trends. As the routine takes over, he loses humanity. He feels like a machine, not a man. So IT fits perfectly in a dark sense.

Leonard a. Wronke Leonard a. Wronke
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in the context you have stated ...I agree with your assessment, Jordan, I retract my previous comment.

Leslie Blackwell Leslie Blackwell
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my fifty cents - perhaps "The" lonely man. Does he dream?

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She had a friend.

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